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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006. r0Pm
The chart illustrates the worldwide sales of digital games ( Mobile Phone, Online, Console and Handheld Games) of 6 years from 2000 to 2006. Overall, it can be seen that the sales of handheld games was the largest and increased significantly over the years which in contrast to console games decreased gradually. With the introduction of mobile and online games, it can be seen that there was a subsequent increase in total sales of digital games. In the year 2000 the sale of handheld games nearly touched 12bn dollars whereas that of console games was 6bn dollars. The sales for handheld games rose steadily till it reached 15bn dollars in 2002, in contrast the sales declined and reached around 4bn dollars for console games. The following years the sales for handheld games and console games remained unchanged and the sales was around 15bn dollars and 4bn dollars respectively in 2003, 2004 and 2005. The sales for handheld segment climbed and reached a peak of 18bn dollars in 2006 whereas the sales declined further and reached 3bn dollars in same year. Mobile phone games was introduced in the year 2001 and online games subsequently in 2002. The sales for both segment was around 1bn dollars in 2002 and both rose gradually in even pattern till 2005 where sales for both sections were around 6bn dollars. In 2006, the online game segment broke off from the pattern and sales reached around 9bn dollars whereas the sales increased only 1bn for mobile phone games.
The chart illustrates the worldwide
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of digital
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Mobile Phone,
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Online
,
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Console
and Handheld
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Games)
of 6 years from 2000 to 2006.

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, it can be
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seen
that the
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of handheld
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games
was the largest and increased
significantly
over the years which
in contrast
to
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console
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games
decreased
gradually
. With the introduction of mobile and
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online
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games
, it can be
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seen
that there was a subsequent increase in total
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sales
of digital games.

In the
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year
2000 the
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sale
of handheld
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games
nearly
touched 12bn
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dollars
whereas that of
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console
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was 6bn
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dollars
. The
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for handheld
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games
rose
steadily
till it
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reached
15bn
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in 2002,
in contrast
the
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declined and
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reached
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around
4bn
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dollars
for
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console
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games
. The following years the
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sales
for handheld
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games
and
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console
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games
remained unchanged and the
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was
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around
15bn
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and 4bn
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respectively
in 2003, 2004 and 2005.
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The
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for handheld segment climbed and
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reached
a peak of 18bn
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dollars
in 2006 whereas the
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declined
further
and
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reached
3bn
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dollars
in same year.

Mobile phone
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games
was introduced
in the
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year
2001 and
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online
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games
subsequently
in 2002. The
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sales
for both segment was
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around
1bn
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dollars
in 2002 and both rose
gradually
in even pattern till 2005 where
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sales
for both sections were
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around
6bn
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dollars
. In 2006, the
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online
game segment broke off from the pattern and
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sales
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reached
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around
9bn
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dollars
whereas the
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sales
increased
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only
1bn for mobile phone
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games
.
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