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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

The provided graph presents the data about the number of people who traveled by train in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5. Overall, passengers in the National rail network kept gradually decreasing until hitting the nadir at around the middle of the period; however, those of London underground reduced to the lowest in the same timeframe, from thereupon, both simultaneously improved and peaked. While the Light rail and metro system users marginally decreased for half of the time before slowly growing to the highest. In the beginning, 1 billion citizens commuted through the National railway network, which slightly rose to about 1. 1 billion around 1955 before slowly decreasing and hitting the nadir at near 600 million in the early 80s. In contrast, the travel through London underground remained almost stable for about 25 years; after that, it fell to its lowest at half a billion. From thereon, it experienced a boom and reached the acme at around 1 billion passenger journeys in 2004/5; similarly, the figures of trips made through National railway network also boomed at the same time and reached the previous high at around 1100 million in the end. Comparatively, very few used light rails and metro systems, which slightly diminished until 1980, furthermore, it slowly soared to the peak at around 200 million passengers in the 2004/5.
The provided graph presents the data about the number of
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who traveled by train in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

Overall
, passengers in the National rail network
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kept
gradually
decreasing until hitting the nadir at
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the middle of the period;
however
, those of London underground
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reduced
to the lowest in the same timeframe, from thereupon, both
simultaneously
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improved
and peaked. While the Light rail and metro system users
marginally
decreased for half of the time
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before
slowly
growing to the highest.

In the beginning, 1
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billion
citizens commuted through the National railway network, which
slightly
rose to about 1. 1
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billion
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around
1955
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before
slowly
decreasing and hitting the nadir at near 600 million in the early 80s.
In contrast
, the travel through London underground remained almost stable for about 25 years; after that, it fell to its lowest at half a
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billion
. From thereon, it experienced a boom and reached the acme at
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around
1
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billion
passenger journeys in 2004/5;
similarly
, the figures of trips made through National railway network
also
boomed at the same time and reached the previous high at
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around
1100 million in the
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end
.

Comparatively
,
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very
few
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used
light rails and metro systems, which
slightly
diminished until 1980,
furthermore
, it
slowly
soared to the peak at
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around
200 million passengers in the 2004/5.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

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