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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information office in one city over a six-montu period in 2011.

The bar graph illustrates the three modes of inquiry received by the Tourist Information Office of one city in a six-month period in year 2011. Overall, inquiry made in person shows a continuous increased for the six-month period. Whilst enquiry by letter or mail and by telephone had a slight changes in their trend. In January 2011, there were more than 400 inquiries received in person and it increased dramatically until it reached its peaked of more than 1800. Inquiries received by telephone in January 2011 was accounted for greater than 800 and had a slight drop in February. Between February and March 2011, the inquiry by telephone rose to 1000 and remained plateau until April. Moreover, it skyrocketed to 1400 inquiries between April and May 2011 and reached 1600 enquiries on June 2011. Inquiries received by letter or mail had a various trend compared to the two prior modalities used. In January, inquiries made by letter/mail started at almost 800 and gradually decreased for the six-month period reaching its lowest enquiry of almost 400 in June 2011.
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by the Tourist Information Office of one city in a six-month period in year 2011.

Overall
,
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made in person
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a continuous increased for the six-month period. Whilst
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by letter or mail and by telephone had a slight
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changes
in their trend.

In January 2011, there were more than 400
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peaked of more than 1800.
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Inquiries
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by telephone in January 2011
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for greater than 800 and had a slight drop in February. Between February and March 2011, the
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by telephone rose to 1000 and remained plateau until April.
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between April and May 2011 and reached 1600
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on June
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2011. Inquiries
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by letter or mail had a various trend compared to the two prior modalities
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. In January,
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made by letter/mail
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at almost 800 and
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decreased for the six-month period reaching its lowest
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of almost 400 in June 2011.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information office in one city over a six-montu period in 2011.

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