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The graph below shows the number of books read by man and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by man and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Bn9a
The line graph tells the total of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Overall, the number of books that read by men increased every year. The books that read by women also increased, yet in 2013 the amount of books read by women decreased. Men read more books compare to women in the final year. Regarding to the books read by men at the library, it went up about 11000 books in 3 years. The book read by men rose the most between 2012 and 2013. In 2014, man had read approximately 14000 books. From 2011 to 2012, the books read by men grew up the least. Besides, the books read by women went up approximately 3000 books in the last 3 years period. the books read by women pecked in 2013 by around 10000 books. Between 2013 and 2014, the books read by women dropped about 2000 books. In the last year, women had read around 7000 books.
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increased every
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decreased.
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more
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compare to
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in the final year.

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at the library, it went up about 11000
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in 3 years. The
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rose the most between 2012 and 2013. In 2014,
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approximately 14000
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went up approximately 3000
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in the last 3 years period.
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pecked in 2013 by around 10000
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dropped about 2000
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,
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had
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around 7000
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.
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