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The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 british companies in the car retail industries for the 2000 financial year .

The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 british companies in the car retail industries for the 2000 financial year. 1o76q
The rendered line chart illustrates the information about the three companies (Acme sports car, Branson motors and Curtis car mart )of Britain in the car retail industries, the monthly profits of the companies during the financial year of 2000Overall, it is crystal clear that Acme sports car had starting level on top of other two companies but at the end the profits of this company was less and Curtis car mart profit was increased in the end of the year At a cursory glance, the British company, Acme sports car started profits (70000 £ )in april to may at the toppest level as compare to Branson motors, they started profits in april (20000£) but in june the acme sports car profits decreased and Branson motors, benefits increased month by month. As a result, in the next year the profits of Acme sports car was only (20000£)but the Branson motors monthly income increased (approximately 30000£Analazing further, the monthly income of Curtis car mart was only (40000£)in started month april as more than profit of Branson motors (20000£). Apart from this, the Curtis car mart profits went up and down in the month of may to december. At the end of the financial year 2000, the profit of this, (8000£)the highest level of other two countries of Britain. Moreover, the Branson motors profit (6000£)in the end of year was less than the profit of Curtis car mart.
The rendered line chart illustrates the information about the three
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