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The bar graph below shows the average rainfall for australia

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The bar graph compares the variation in average rainfall in Australia for previous year and the line graph illustrates it for last 40 years. At first glance, it is observed that in bar graph, during January to March in Australia, rainfall showed a constant flowed about 60 mm. In addition, it is noticeable that the period of April to October had experienced a dramatic decrease from about 20 mm to 10 mm. Moreover, in last two month rainfall noticed 45 mm and above in Australia. In line graph, initially at 60 mm in the very first month, the rainfall in Australia fell down at 30 mm in April. During April and September, it experienced a constant decrease from about 30 mm to 10 mm. There was a rapid surge in rainfall after september. At the end it reached at 60 mm. Overall, it is clear that rainfall in Australia showed a rapid surge in first three month and las two month. In between April to October, it was observed steady decrease.
The bar
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compares the variation in average
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rainfall
in Australia for previous year and the line
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illustrates it for last 40 years.

At
first
glance, it
is observed
that in bar
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, during January to March in Australia,
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rainfall
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showed
a constant flowed about 60 mm.
In addition
, it is noticeable that the period of April to October had experienced a dramatic decrease from about 20 mm to 10 mm.
Moreover
, in last two
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month
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rainfall
noticed 45 mm and above in Australia.

In line
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,
initially
at 60 mm in the
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very
first
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month
, the
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rainfall
in Australia fell down at 30 mm in April. During April and September, it experienced a constant decrease from about 30 mm to 10 mm. There was a rapid surge in
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rainfall
after
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september
. At the
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end
it reached at 60 mm.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that
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rainfall
in Australia
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showed
a rapid surge in
first
three
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and
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las
two
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. In between April to October, it
was observed
steady decrease.

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