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The graph below shows the macronutrient intake of Australians in terms of kilo calories per day per person from 1909 to 2006

The graph below shows the macronutrient intake of Australians in terms of kilo calories per day per person from 1909 to 2006 VEop7

The line graph given depicts the three macro-level nutritives ( carbohydrates, fat as well as protein) consumption of Australian citizens each day between 1909 and 2006. The units were measured in kilocalories which are shown on the vertical axis, whereas the horizontal axis represents the years of calculation. Overall, the macronutrients under study included carbohydrates, fat and protein. The intake of carbohydrates by a person in a day is higher than others, while people have less quantity of protein. First of all, at the initial stage the ingestion of sources of carbohydrate at the level of 1400 kg in calories. Afterwards, it had a fluctuated deduction which was about 400-kilogram calories then regained the previous status by 1999. Secondly, Australian people included fat in their diet at the range of 800 kcal. It had followed a gradual growth of up to 1000 kcal with slight variations. Lastly, the protein occupied the position of least consumable which persistent state from the starting year to the end.

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