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The graph below shows the destinations of holiday makers from a particular Asian country in 2012.

The graph below shows the destinations of holiday makers from a particular Asian country in 2012. oVp7w
The bar graph shows where tourists from an Asian country went to celebrate their holidays in 2012. Overall, Malaysia and India were their favourite destinations. As can be seen from the graph, the highest number of holiday seekers, one million to be exact, went to Malaysia in 2012. The second largest tourist outflow from this country was to India with around 0. 8 million travellers. Japanese share to this country’s tourists was exactly 800 thousand which was roughly 100 thousand higher than that of Australia going tourists. Furthermore, 0. 6 million tourists visited Korea this year which was approximately 0. 2 million higher than the holiday seekers to Sri Lanka. Finally, the lowest number of tourists made their holidays in Pakistan in the same year which was around. 25 million. In summary, most of the travellers from this country preferred other Asian countries like Malaysia, India and Japan as their holiday stops while Pakistan was their least favourite destination in 2012.
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where
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from an Asian
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went to celebrate their
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in 2012.
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, Malaysia and India were their
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destinations.

As can be
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from the graph, the highest number of
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seekers, one
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to be exact, went to Malaysia in 2012. The second largest
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outflow from this
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was to India with around 0. 8
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. Japanese share to this
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country’s
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was exactly 800 thousand which was roughly 100 thousand higher than that of Australia going
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.
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, 0. 6
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million
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visited Korea this year which was approximately 0. 2
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million
higher than the
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seekers to Sri Lanka.
Finally
, the lowest number of
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made their
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holidays
in Pakistan in the same year which was around. 25 million.

In summary, most of the
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preferred other Asian
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like Malaysia, India and Japan as their
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holiday
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while Pakistan was their least
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destination in 2012.
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