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The graphs show the number of students studying in one university, the government spending and students’ family background.

The charts illustrate how the number of students and the government spending had changed in one university over 25 years from 1984, and family background of student economy. Overall, the number of students had an upward trend with the corresponding drops in that of the government spending during the entire period, due to the highest percentage of high income family. According to the first bar chart, the number of students had the lowest number of all at 150 thousand in 1984. After that, a significant increase could be seen from 250 thousand to the peak at 400 thousand till the end except for a slight decrease in 1994. According to the second line chart, the government spending had the highest number of all at 140 thousand in 1984, before remaining stable for the next 5 years, and its number was dropped to the deep at 10 thousand in 2004, rising slightly lower than 12 thousand in the end. According to the pie chart, the percentage of high income family accounted for little more than half of all, with about 52%. Low and middle income family shared a great similarity with the rates of 26% and 22%, respectively.
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in one university over 25 years from 1984, and family background of
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economy.
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, the
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of
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had an upward trend with the corresponding drops in that of the
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spending during the entire period, due to the highest percentage of high income family.

According to the
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bar
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, the
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of
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had the lowest
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of all at 150 thousand in 1984. After that, a significant increase could be
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seen
from 250 thousand to the peak at 400 thousand till the
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end
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except for
a slight decrease in 1994.

According to the second line
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chart
, the
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spending had the highest
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of all at 140 thousand in 1984,
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remaining stable for the
next
5 years, and its
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was dropped
to the deep at 10 thousand in 2004, rising
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lower than 12 thousand in the
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end
.

According to the pie
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, the percentage of high income family accounted for
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more than half of all, with about 52%. Low and middle income family shared a great similarity with the rates of 26% and 22%,
respectively
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