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The graph below shows the consuption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

the line graph provides information about consumers of margarine, Low fat- reduced spreads and buttle spreads over period of 28 years. It is clear that there were significant changes in the amount of consuption spread by all three categories shown on the graph. while butter and margarine decrease over the 28 years. Howeever, low fat- reduced spreads had growth in 11 years. From 1981 to 1986, in terms of buttle, it went up sharply by almost 155 grams of consuption spread. By contrast, Margarine had lower close to four fifths. Otherwise, during of the 23 years, buttle spread plunged gradually a half grams, but By 1996, consuption of margarine went up by a hundred grams It is interested in to note that law fat-reduced spreads rose to dramaticly somewhere in the vicinity of 85 grams. By 2007, whereas Margarine dropped by two fifths grams. Likewise low fat and reduced spreads fell slowly to 70 grams
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the
line graph provides information about consumers of
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margarine
, Low
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fat
-
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reduced
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spreads
and
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buttle
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spreads
over period of 28 years.

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clear
that there were significant
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changes
in the amount of
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consuption
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spread
by all three categories shown on the graph.
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while
butter and
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margarine
decrease over the 28 years.
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Howeever
, low
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fat
-
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reduced
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spreads
had growth in 11 years.

From 1981 to 1986, in terms of
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buttle
, it went up
sharply
by almost 155
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grams
of
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consuption
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spread
. By contrast,
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Margarine
had lower close to four fifths.
Otherwise
, during of the 23 years,
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buttle
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spread
plunged
gradually
a half
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grams
,
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but
By 1996,
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consuption
of
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margarine
went up by a hundred grams

It
is interested
in to note that law
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fat
-
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reduced
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spreads
rose to
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dramaticly
somewhere in the vicinity of 85
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grams
. By 2007, whereas
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Margarine
dropped by two fifths
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grams
.
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Likewise
low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
fell
slowly
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consuption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

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