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The graph below shows the consumption of four types of dairy products in the USA from 1970 to 2010.

The graph below shows the consumption of four types of dairy products in the USA from 1970 to 2010. bW9g
The graph illustrates the sale of the four kinds of dairy products (cheese, fully-fat ice cream, law – fat ice cream and yogurt) in the United States between 1970 and 2010. Overall, the consumption of cheese and yogurt increased in the given period, whereas the sale of fully fat ice cream and low- ice cream felt. In 1970, average each person ate around 7. 5 pounds of cheese and 0. 5 pounds of yoghurt. During the first sixteen years the consumption of both products gradually went up, however, in 1987 the amount of eaten cheese moderately dropped from 1987 to 1989 (respectively 16. 5 to 16 pounds per person). After that, the consumption of both products steadily rose until 2010, cheese to around 22. 5 pounds per person and yoghurt to below 9. 5. In 1970 the consumption of low – fat ice cream was around 4. 9 pounds per person. This value was stable until 2000, when it started to drop slightly to around 4. 8 pounds per person to 2010. The sale of the full-fat ice cream was the highest in the 1970 with above 11 pounds per person. It insignificantly fluctuated in the presented period of time, but it gradually decreased from 11 to 10 pounds per person between 1985 to 1989. It reached its lowest point in 2010 around 8 pounds per person.
The graph illustrates the sale of the four kinds of dairy products
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, law
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and yogurt) in the United States between 1970 and 2010.

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, the
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consumption
of
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cheese
and yogurt increased in the
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period, whereas the sale of
fully
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fat
ice
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cream
and low- ice
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felt.

In 1970, average each
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person
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5 pounds
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. During the
first
sixteen years the
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consumption
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gradually
went up,
however
, in 1987 the amount of eaten
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cheese
moderately
dropped from 1987 to 1989 (
respectively
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person)
. After that, the
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consumption
of both products
steadily
rose until 2010,
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per
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person
and
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yoghurt
to below 9. 5.

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. This value was stable until 2000, when it
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to 2010. The sale of the full-
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was the highest in the 1970 with above
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11 pounds
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. It
insignificantly
fluctuated in the presented period of time,
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it
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of four types of dairy products in the USA from 1970 to 2010.

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