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The graph below shows the consumption of fast food in Australia by teenagers in the year 1975 to 2000

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The line graph compares the fast food consumption by teenagers in Australia between the years 1975 to 2000. Overall the consumption of fish by Australian teenagers declined over the period of time whereas amount of Pizza and hamburgers that where it and increased. To begin with the year 1975 the most popular fast food was fish and chips which was eaten hundred times a year this was a far higher than pizza and hamburgers which were consumed approximately five times a year. However, the rate of fish and chips decreased in the year 1982 more than 80 times of years while, other fast food consumption of Pizza and hamburgers gradually climbed to 40 and 60 times per year in the year 1980 to 1985 respectively. Further analysing the graph, fish and chips hit a trough at 40 times a in year 1990, 1995 and 2000. On spite of, Pizza and hamburgers topped to 80 and 100 times a year. Furthermore, this trend remain stable from the year 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers which was ended at 100 times a year.
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in Australia between the years 1975 to 2000.

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declined over the period of
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whereas amount of Pizza and hamburgers that where it and increased.

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1975 the most popular
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food was fish and chips which
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this was a far higher than pizza and hamburgers which
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1982 more than 80
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of years while, other
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food consumption of Pizza and hamburgers
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climbed to 40 and 60
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1980 to 1985
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the graph, fish and chips hit a trough at 40
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1990, 1995 and 2000. On spite of, Pizza and hamburgers topped to 80 and 100
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1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was
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