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Illustrated apparently from the map is the reconstruction of a bookstore in 2000 compared to now.

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Illustrated apparently from the map is the reconstruction of a bookstore in 2000 compared to now. First of all, while the places for travel books, new books and service desk were kept stably near the front door, other shelves were relocated. Namely, in 2000, fiction, which were put along the left wall from the entrance and a half of the back wall, occupied the majority of books. Meanwhile, that bookshelf is now divided into three equal areas for art, cookery and fiction books with the back space for non-fiction. One more noticeable change of the bookstore is that at the bottom right corner of the room where non-fiction books used to be, a cafeteria is built with larger area. Last but not least, the location of hobbies, art and cookery is now replaced by a round table with four chairs for readers with no longer hobbies books. Overall, despite an enormous change of the location, the diversity of book types in this bookstore has been remaining from years, and the reading area are overwhelmingly improved.
Illustrated
apparently
from the map is the reconstruction of a bookstore in 2000 compared to
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now
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, while the places for travel
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books
, new
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books
and service desk were
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kept
stably
near the front door, other shelves
were relocated
.
Namely
, in 2000, fiction, which
were put
along the
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left
wall from the entrance and a half of the back wall, occupied the majority of
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books
. Meanwhile, that bookshelf is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
divided into three equal areas for art, cookery and fiction
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books
with the back space for non-fiction.

One more noticeable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of the bookstore is that
The usual prepositions to use with a corner "in" not "on". Did you mean "in the bottom right corner"?
at the bottom right corner
of the room where non-fiction
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books
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used
to be, a cafeteria
is built
with larger area.

Last
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but
not least, the location of hobbies, art and cookery is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
replaced by a round table with four chairs for readers with no longer hobbies books.

Overall
, despite an enormous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of the location, the diversity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
types in this bookstore has been remaining from years, and the reading area are
overwhelmingly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.
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IELTS academic Illustrated apparently from the map is the reconstruction of a bookstore in 2000 compared to now.

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