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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. 7jVA
The line graph describes the figures for daily travel by people in the UK using three different modes of transport: Car, bus and train from 1970 to 2030. Overall, the car is the most common means of transport for drivers in the UK during the period shown. In addition, the numbers of people using the car and train increase constantly, while the number of bus users decrease steadily. In 1970, around five million Britain commuters went by cars everyday. At the same time, the bus and the train used by individuals were four million and three million, respectively. In the year 2000; the number of people traveling to work rose to seven million and the number of commuting rail passengers climbed to three million, whereas there was a small decline in the number of bus users By 2030, the number of people who go by cars is likely to rocket nine million. Also, the number of train users is estimated nearly 5 million. However; buses are predicted to become a less popular choice; with only 3 million daily users
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the figures for daily travel by
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people
in the UK using three
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different
modes of transport:
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Car
, bus and
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train
from 1970 to 2030.

Overall
, the
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car
is the most common means of transport for drivers in the UK during the period shown.
In addition
, the
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numbers
of
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people
using the
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car
and
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train
increase
constantly
, while the
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number
of bus users decrease
steadily
.

In 1970, around five
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million
Britain commuters went by
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cars
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everyday
. At the same time, the bus and the
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train
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used
by individuals were four
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million
and three
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million
,
respectively
. In the year 2000; the
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number
of
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people
traveling to work rose to seven
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million
and the
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number
of commuting rail passengers climbed to three
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million
, whereas there was a
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small
decline in the
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number
of bus users

By 2030, the
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number
of
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people
who go by
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cars
is likely to rocket nine
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million
.
Also
, the
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number
of
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train
users
is estimated
nearly
5
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million
.
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However
; buses
are predicted
to become a less popular choice; with
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only
3
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million
daily users

IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

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