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The graph below shows the average calories Ishtar countries in 2005. intake for person in e

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Glance at the given colum graph compares the average calorie intake of eight different countries in 2003. Overall, it's clear seen that consumption for all countries varied between 1800 to 3400 calories per day. The countries with the highest calories intake was the United States with staggering 3400 calories consumed per day on average. Not for behind was New Zealnd, where people consumed about 3200 calories per day during the year in 2003. Intake for Spain and Mexico were slightly higher than 2500 calories per day. On the lower side of the Spectrum were countries like China at 2200 daily calories, India at 2100 daily calories and Somalia and Indonesia both at roughly 1800 calories per day. When comparing the highest and lowest value, America had the highest calorie intake and Indonesia had the lowest calorie intake.
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in 2003.
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was the United States with staggering 3400 calories consumed per day on average. Not for behind was New
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consumed about 3200 calories per day during the year in 2003.
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like China at 2200 daily calories, India at 2100 daily calories and Somalia and Indonesia both at roughly 1800 calories per day. When comparing the highest and lowest value, America had the highest calorie
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