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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. r3bL
The above graph is a representation of men and women who studied in britain for a period of 3 years. To complete their further education some of them have joined universities with a full time education if possible or a part time education. Meanwhile the statistical data shows that there has been a rise in the number of male and female students who are studying full time in their college. Although in the case of part time learning the number of men who opted for it has seen a fluctuation in this time period. Whereas there was a steady increase of female students who were managing a part-time education. There has been a significant rise of graduates over these years. Data states that male scholars have been seeing an increase in full time education gradually. At the same moment part-time scholars had more than 1000 million people during the year of 1970-1971 since then they have seen a decrease of 150million and increase of of 170 million over the years respectively.
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of them have
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education if possible or a part
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the statistical data
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that there has been a rise in the number of male and female students
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who
are studying full
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time
in their college. Although in the case of part
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time
learning the number of
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men
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opted for it has
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a fluctuation in this
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period.
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there was a steady increase of female students
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who
were managing a part-time education.

There has been a significant rise of graduates over these years. Data states that male scholars have been seeing an increase in full
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time
education
gradually
. At the same moment part-time scholars had more than 1000 million
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people
during the
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of 1970-1971 since then they have
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seen
a decrease of 150million and increase
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170 million over the years
respectively
.

IELTS academic The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

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