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Process of creating honey

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The diagram represents the seven most important stages of how a bee produces honey. The process consists of building a container, finding nectar and using their wings to create a common ingredient: Honey. The bees begin their process by building their hive, a container where bees live. Afterwards, they set off to search for a flower that will provide them with nectar. The nectar is a sweet liquid; it is necessary for the production of honey. When the bees return to their hives with the nectar, they place it into cells. With all of the bee’s materials ready, it begins to work. The bee starts off by placing himself atop the cells and flapping his wings to generate air. As air is generated, evaporation occurs which transforms the water inside the nectar to gas. As the water vapor is released from the hive, what is left inside is what we know as honey.

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important
 stages of how a bee produces honey. The process consists of building a container, finding You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 and using their wings to create a common ingredient: Honey.

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begin
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. Afterwards, they set off to search for a flower that will provide them with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 is a sweet liquid; it is necessary for the production of honey. When the bees return to their hives with the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
, they place it into cells.

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starts
 off by placing himself atop the cells and flapping his wings to generate air. As air is generated
, evaporation occurs which transforms the water inside the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 to gas. As the water vapor is released
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left
 inside is what we know as honey. 