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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. QLw9X
The bar chart illustrates the employment rates of males and females in 6 different countries between the years 1995 and 2005. It is clearly seen that the employment ratio of every 6 countries has increased. Overall, the information given is in percentage. The blue and green bar indicates the employment rate of males and females respectively in 1995 and for 2005 it is in the red and purple bar for males and females respectively. In Australia, the rate of employment increased in 2005, while in 1995, Only 56% and 28% of males and females are employed. In Switzerland, the employment rate is slightly increased, the growth ratio of employment in Iceland is similar to Switzerland. In the United Kingdom, the male's employment rate went up 70 percent in 2005, whilst, New Zealand has the least female employee in 1995. The USA shows huge growth in women's employment rate from 45% to 62 % in 1995 and 2005 respectively.
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In Australia, the
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in Iceland is similar to Switzerland.

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went up 70 percent in 2005, whilst, New Zealand has the least
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employee in 1995. The USA
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huge growth in women's
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from 45% to 62 % in 1995 and 2005
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IELTS academic The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

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