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The graph below shows hours spent by students of different age groups per week on leisure activities and study.

The graph below shows hours spent by students of different age groups per week on leisure activities and study. we00Y
The bar graph illustrates the information about hours spent by pupils of distinctive age groups per week on free time activities and study. At a fleeting glance, it is immensely clear from the bar graph that spent by student on leisure activities more than 40 hours, being higher than hours of study by approximately 20 hours by 10-12 years after which it decreased by 12-14 years to merely above 30 hours as well this age group focused on study by just above 40 hours. Furthermore, observer of 14-16 years spent a lot time on their study by 60 hours in per week, while minimum time was being spent by student on free time activity to 30 hours according to per week. Delving deeper, hours of per week was remained relatively same because 16-18 years age group give preference equal to free time activities and also study by merely above 50 hours. Moreover, student preferred to study than the free time activities to nearly 70 hours from merely above 10 hours by per week. Overall, despite violent fluctuations hours was remained stable in the leisure activities and study by teenage group.
The bar graph illustrates the information about
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30
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Delving deeper,
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Overall
, despite violent fluctuations
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was remained
stable in the leisure
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and
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by teenage
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.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows hours spent by students of different age groups per week on leisure activities and study.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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