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The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015.

The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015. JMW0
The bar chats demonstrate the age group of men and women with average percentage of daily calories from fast food in 2015. Overall, we can see the percentage of male always exceeded than female in calories per day. In addition, the percentage of consumption among them had decreased compared to their age in the graph. The highest rate of male consumption calories between 18 and 35 with 17 percent more than 1 percent than female of these ages. From 35 to 49 years old, rate of male more than 10 percent, when female less than 10 percent by 0. 5%. In the age of 50-64 there is small margin compared to men with 9 percent, while women 8. 5 percent. The lowest percentage both of age group in 65 and plus, when female had 3. 5 percent, and male had 1 percent more, 4. 5%.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015.

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