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The graph below shows a survey result of 4000 participants who expressed what important aspects they have learned from the internship they have completed

The graph below shows a survey result of 4000 participants who expressed what important aspects they have learned from the internship they have completed OGME
The pie chart illustrates the important outcomes, which were gained by 4000 participants from their internship. Units are measured in percentage(%). Other skills were the most important outcome according to over a quarter participants. Whereas practical knowledge and communication skills were gained by almost one third of the participants combined, 15% and 14% respectively. 10% participants understood the industry they were working on. On the other hand, only a 3% percentage of participants learned teamwork as an important skill. It was almost similar outcome as work environment, which was gained by 4%. Work operation, future planning, time management and real work experience were gained 7% of the participants. Overall, practical knowledge and other skills were learned by the most of the participants, while teamwork and experience in work environment was least important outcome.
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by 4000
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from their internship. Units
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according to over a quarter
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participants
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skills
were
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gained
by almost one third of the
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participants
combined, 15% and 14%
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. 10%
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participants
understood the industry they were working on.

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participants
learned teamwork as an
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important
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skill
. It was almost similar
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outcome
as
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work
environment, which was
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gained
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Work
operation, future planning, time management and real
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work
experience were
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gained
7% of the participants.

Overall
, practical knowledge and other
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skills
were learned
by the most of the
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participants
, while teamwork and experience in
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work
environment was
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IELTS academic The graph below shows a survey result of 4000 participants who expressed what important aspects they have learned from the internship they have completed

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
133 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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