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The graph below shown the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant

The graph illustrates how many millions of visitors staying on the cruise ships and island from 2010 to 2017. Overall, the total number of visitors on cruise ships and island were highest that the particular island of Caribbean. Firstly, visitors staying on cruise ships began with 0. 3 million of visitors during 2010. Its sightly increased in 2011 and plunged at 2012. Again, visitors rose up to 2 million between 2018 to 2017 respectively. Secondly, visitors staying on island was 0. 8 million of visitors from 2010 to 2011. It grew up to 1, 5 millions of visitors from 2011 to 2015 and gently, decrease in 2016 with 0. 3 millions of visitors. Similarly, visitors went up to 1. 5 millon in 2017. In the addition, visitors staying on cruise ships and island were intersected between 2015 and 2016. The total number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island started with 1 millions in 2019 which rocketed up to 3. 5 million from 2010 to 2017 respectively.
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from 2010 to 2017.

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began with 0. 3
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during 2010. Its
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rose up to 2
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from 2010 to 2011. It grew up to 1, 5
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from 2011 to 2015 and
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IELTS academic The graph below shown the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

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