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The graph below showed me number of people who moved from rural areas to cities in three countries from 1990 to 2015

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The line graph provides information about the number of people who moved from rural areas to cities in Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 1990 to 2015. In general, movement numbers from both Iran and Indonesia country increased dramatically, while there was a significant decrease. Looking in more detail, the graph illustrates that there was a rapid fall in Iran movement numbers. For example, between 1990 and 2005 the numbers declined gradually from around 40 to around 10. There was then an upward trend in the number, reaching a peak of nearly 95 in 2015. The number of Indonesia movement showed a similar trend. To be specific, from 1990 to 2000 the number fell steadily. However, Indonisia people movement soared by around 95 in final year. In contrast, Russia people movement views a different trend. Between 1990 and 2000 the people movement remain steadily, before plummeting sharply to nearly 20 over a periode of year One notable point is that in 2015 both Iran and Indonesia people movement were the same
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from rural areas to cities in Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 1990 to 2015.
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from both Iran and Indonesia country increased
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, while there was a significant decrease.

Looking in more detail, the graph illustrates that there was a rapid fall in Iran
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.
For example
, between 1990 and 2005 the
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declined
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from around 40 to around 10. There was then an upward trend in the
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, reaching a peak of
nearly
95 in 2015.

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of Indonesia
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a similar trend. To be specific, from 1990 to 2000 the
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fell
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soared by around 95 in final year.

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, Russia
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views a
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trend. Between 1990 and 2000 the
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remain
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One notable point is that in 2015 both Iran and Indonesia
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were the
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IELTS academic The graph below showed me number of people who moved from rural areas to cities in three countries from 1990 to 2015

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