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The digram illustrates how an australian town adopted a rainfall

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The diagram given is a demonstration of the way which Australian state used to collect rainwater and make it drinkable. Overall, the rainwater is collected from the roof to the drainpipes. This water will be drinkable after going through a process of filtration and treatment with chemicals. the process involves three main steps: flitter water, storage rainfall and treatment water by adding chemicals material to make rain fit to drinking. This process needs many tools as tubes, drains, tank, chemical material filter device and treatment device. Initially, the rain start and fall on the roof of houses. then the rainfall moving to the pipes by drains which joined with homes. Next, the rainwater was filtered from impurities. after that passing through the channels to storage in the tank. The next stage of the process, the rainfall need medication by using chemicals in. Ultimately, the rain treatment become fit to be drinking. it travels along the pipes that lead back into the houses in the towns where people can use the rain for daily consumption in Australian country.
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is a demonstration of the way which Australian state
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used
to collect rainwater and
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make
it drinkable.
Overall
, the rainwater
is collected
from the roof to the drainpipes. This water will be drinkable after going through a
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process
of filtration and
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treatment
with
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chemicals
.
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the
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process
involves three main steps: flitter water, storage rainfall and
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treatment
water by adding
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chemicals
material to
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make
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rain
fit to drinking. This
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process
needs
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many
tools as tubes, drains, tank,
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chemical
material filter device and
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treatment
device.
Initially
, the
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rain
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start
and fall on the roof of
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houses
.
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then
the rainfall moving to the pipes by drains which
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joined
with homes.
Next
, the rainwater
was filtered
from impurities.
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after
that passing through the channels to storage in the tank. The
next
stage of the
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process
, the rainfall need medication by using
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chemicals
in.
Ultimately
, the
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rain
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treatment
become fit to be drinking.
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it
travels along the pipes that lead back into the
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houses
in the towns where
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people
can
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use
the
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rain
for daily consumption in Australian country.
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IELTS academic The digram illustrates how an australian town adopted a rainfall

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