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The graph below gives information about total oil use of 4 main consumers from 2009 to 2030

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The line chart depict the detailed information about oil consumption by 4 region Us, China, Western Europe and Japan and Middle East over a period of 21 years from 2009 to 2030. Looking from overall perspective, it is readily apparent that, US is leading country for oil usage per day, whereas it is expect to fall dramatically. Western Europe and Japan will continue to decline to become lowest point in the end of the period. while consumption of oil will increase both in China an Middle East. To begin with, oil use of major consumer in US hover in 10 millions of barrels from 2009 and 2015, but precious fall is predict to just over 4 million by 2030. Western Europe and Japan is forecasted to maintain similiar pattern, where this will dwinled from 4 million to nearly over 2 million. However, China and Middle East expected to rise quickly. This nations started
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Us, China, Western Europe and Japan and Middle East over a period of 21 years from 2009 to 2030.

Looking from
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that, US is leading country for
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oil
usage per day, whereas it is
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expect
to fall
dramatically
. Western Europe and Japan will continue to decline to become
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lowest
point in the
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of the period.
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while
consumption of
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will increase both in China
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an
Middle East.

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of major consumer in US hover in 10
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millions
of barrels
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,
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precious fall is
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to
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over 4
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million
by 2030. Western Europe and Japan
is forecasted
to maintain
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similiar
pattern, where this will
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dwinled
from 4
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to
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over 2
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, China and Middle East
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expected
to rise
quickly
.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about total oil use of 4 main consumers from 2009 to 2030

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