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The graph below gives information about monthly electricity, water and gas use at a leisure centre in Manchester.

The graph below gives information about monthly electricity, water and gas use at a leisure centre in Manchester. WYJk0
The information about monthly electricity, Water and gas use at a leisure centre in Manchester, which is depicted by the rendered bar chart. It can be seen, in Munchester, first two months water and gas have reached around 4. 1 but electricity power increased slightly above 5. 2 points. Moreover, 4 points of electricity used and 3 to 3. 2 points of gases and water have wasted in March. In April and May months three main sources ratio almost equal in Manchester. In addition, water consumption has inclined sharply after three months. but other two Sources have used 2. 7 in July and August. Furthermore, in September electricity and gas used equally but water has used maximum in that month. However using of water almost same ratio in two months but in last year, its number around declined slightly by 0. 1. In December, electricity used more in Manchester. Overall, gas source used less as compared to other sources over 12 months in Manchester.
The information about monthly
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electricity
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gas
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use
at a leisure
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centre
in Manchester, which
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seen
, in
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Munchester
,
first
two
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months
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water
and
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gas
have reached around 4. 1
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but
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electricity
power increased
slightly
above 5. 2 points.
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, 4 points of
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electricity
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used
and 3 to 3. 2 points of gases and
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water
have wasted in March. In April and May
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months
three main
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sources
ratio almost equal in Manchester.
In addition
,
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water
consumption has inclined
sharply
after three
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months
.
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but
other two
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Sources
have
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used
2. 7 in July and August.
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, in September
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electricity
and
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gas
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used
equally
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but
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water
has
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used
maximum in that
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month
.
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However
using of
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water
almost same ratio in two
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months
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but
in last year, its number around declined
slightly
by 0. 1. In December,
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electricity
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used
more in Manchester.
Overall
,
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gas
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source
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used
less
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as
compared to other
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sources
over 12
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months
in Manchester.

IELTS academic The graph below gives information about monthly electricity, water and gas use at a leisure centre in Manchester.

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