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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below E37Xq
The line graph shows the differences in the number of daily visits to two new music websites named Music Choice and Pop Parade in a 15-day period. Overall, it is clear that the number of visitors to both sites fluctuated over the period shown. However, Pop Parade website got higher views than that of Music Choice, except for the 12th and 13th days. As pointed out in the graph, the Pop Parade music website had about 120000 visits in the first three days, which is 3 times higher than that of Music Choice. After that, the figure decreased to 40000 from the third day to the ninth day. Over the last six days, the figure for Pop Parade experienced an upward trend and reached a peak of 175000 on the fifth day. In contrast, the number of hits of Music Choice fluctuated between 20000 and 60000 during the first 11 days. In the next 4 days, the number of users soared and peaked on day 14 (at 120000) and then went down dramatically to over 70000 on the last day of the period.
The line graph
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the differences in the
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of daily visits to two new
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music
websites named
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Music
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Choice
and Pop
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Parade
in a 15-day period.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the
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number
of visitors to both sites fluctuated over the period shown.
However
, Pop
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Parade
website
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got
higher views than that of
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Music
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Choice
,
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except for
the 12th and 13th days.

As pointed out in the graph, the Pop
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Parade
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music
website had about 120000 visits in the
first
three days, which is 3 times higher than that of
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Music
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Choice
. After that, the figure decreased to 40000 from the third day to the ninth day. Over the last six days, the figure for Pop
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Parade
experienced an upward trend and reached a peak of 175000 on the fifth day.

In contrast
, the
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number
of hits of
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Music
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Choice
fluctuated between 20000 and 60000 during the
first
11 days. In the
next
4 days, the
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number
of users soared and peaked on day 14 (at 120000) and then went down
dramatically
to over 70000 on the last day of the period.
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IELTS academic The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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