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The chart shows student expenditure over a three-year period in the United Kingdom.

The chart shows student expenditure over a three-year period in the United Kingdom. wB7oq
The chart shoes the changes which took place in the student spending in the United Kingdom during the three-year period from 1996 to 1999. Students spent 3% less on accommodation, which fell from 23% to 20% of total expenditure, and there was a 2% decrease in spending on food, bills and household goods, which fell from 20% to 18%. At the same time course expenditure went down by 3% from 10% to 7%. Children, who constituted 1% of students' expenditure in 1996, are not represented in 1999. On the other hand, there was a 5% growth in spending on entertainment, which stood at 26% of total expenditure in 1996 but rose to 31% in 1999. Spending on other non-essential items and credit repayments are by 4% to make up 16% of total expenditure. Spending on essential travel went up by 3% while non-essential travel underwent a 1% fall. Overall, with the exception of expenditure on travel, the most significant general change was a shift from spending on essential items to spending on non-essential items.
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in the United Kingdom during the three-year period from 1996 to 1999.

Students spent 3% less on accommodation, which fell from 23% to 20% of total
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expenditure
, and there was a 2% decrease in
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on food, bills and household
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, which fell from 20% to 18%. At the same time course
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went down by 3% from 10% to 7%. Children, who constituted 1% of students'
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in 1996, are not represented in 1999.

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on entertainment, which stood at 26% of total
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in 1996
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rose to 31% in 1999.
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on other non-essential items and credit repayments are by 4% to
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up 16% of total
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expenditure
.
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Spending
on essential travel went up by 3% while non-essential travel underwent a 1% fall.

Overall
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on travel, the most significant general
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was a shift from
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on essential items to
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