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The given plans illustrate how a park has changed from the first day of its establishment to today.

The given plans illustrate how a park has changed from the first day of its establishment to today. n61QR
The given plans illustrate how a park has changed from the first day of its establishment to today. Overall, the park has altered significantly and almost all structures have been knocked down or replaced by new ones. In 1920, the park was opened with the name Grand Park. There was a fountain in the middle of the map and on the left side of it, there was a stage, which was provided for musicians. You could sit in the seats, which were located all around the park. There were three rose gardens. Two of them were located next to Arnold Avenue. One of them was located next to Eldon Street and across to the stage. There was also a glasshouse built up on the right side of the Eldon Street entrance. In the north-east corner of the park, there was a pond for water plants. Over time, the park has seen many changes. Firstly, an entrance for an underground car park has been added, which has located in the south-east corner of the park. Upon this entrance, a water feature has been structured, after the glasshouse has been removed. One of the rose gardens has been demolished, while one of them has been replaced by a cafe. In the center of the park, the fountain has been knocked down and a new rose garden added with many seats. However, other seats of the park have gone. The pond area has been replaced by a play area where children can enjoy. On the left hand of the Rose Garden, an amphitheater has been established for concerts. In spite of the considerable alters, the park is still open for public benefit.
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has
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changed
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first
day of its establishment to
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today
.

Overall
, the
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park
has altered
significantly
and almost all structures have
been knocked
down or replaced by new ones.

In 1920, the
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park
was opened
with the name Grand
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Park
. There was a fountain in the middle of the map and on the
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left
side of it, there was a stage, which
was provided
for musicians. You could sit in the seats, which were
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located
all around the
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park
. There were three
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rose
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gardens
. Two of them were
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located
next
to Arnold Avenue. One of them was
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located
next
to Eldon Street and across to the stage. There was
also
a glasshouse built up on the right side of the Eldon Street entrance. In the north-east corner of the
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park
, there was a pond for water plants.

Over time, the
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park
has
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seen
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many
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changes
.
Firstly
, an entrance for an underground car
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park
has been
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added
, which has
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located
in the south-east corner of the
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park
. Upon this entrance, a water feature has
been structured
, after the glasshouse has
been removed
. One of the
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rose
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gardens
has
been demolished
, while one of them has
been replaced
by a
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cafe
. In the center of the
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park
, the fountain has
been knocked
down and a new
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rose
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garden
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added
with
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many
seats.
However
, other seats of the
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park
have gone. The pond area has
been replaced
by a play area where children can enjoy. On the
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left
hand of the
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Rose
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Garden
, an amphitheater has
been established
for concerts.

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In spite of
the considerable alters, the
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park
is
still
open for public benefit.
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IELTS academic The given plans illustrate how a park has changed from the first day of its establishment to today.

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