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The two maps below show a road access to a city hospital in the year 2007 and in 2010

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The two illustrated maps below gives the information about the highway access to a city hospital in the year 2007 and in 2010. Overall, there are some noticeable changes that occur in the span of 3 years. To begin with, In the year 2007, Outside of the City hospital car parks for staff and for public can be founded along the east side of the hospital road, furthermore, bus stops are easily accessible through the east and west part of the same road for parking area, in front of the city hospital. Moreover, in the year 2010, city hospital made a huge changes around its vicinity. Firstly, they separated the car parks for staff and public, wherein public car park moved alongside the east side of the city hospital and staff car park remained the same place. Secondly, three roundabouts was made through the south road. The first one was located if you will pass through the Ring road the just a bout infront of the city hospital and in few meters away the second one can be found combined. Bus station was built and situated on the west part of the hospital road and Staff car park were on the other side. To sum up, there is a slightly difference nearby city hospital in the span of 3 years such as adding roundabouts within the vicinity of the area, adding car parks and bus stops.
The two illustrated maps below gives the information about the highway access to a city
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2007 and in 2010.
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, bus
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for parking area, in front of the city
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2010, city
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made a huge
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around its vicinity.
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alongside the east side of the city
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remained the same place.
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were on the other side.

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nearby city
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in the span of 3 years such as adding roundabouts within the vicinity of the area, adding
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IELTS academic The two maps below show a road access to a city hospital in the year 2007 and in 2010

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