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The grabh shie da imgk a the green gass

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The given bar graph illustrated the amount of aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008-2010in billions of dollars. Overall, the US gave the maximum developing world, but Netherland and Sweden is least developing. It is very interesting to note the Germany increased aid over the year. The UK provided $20 billion in 2008. The figure fall by $ 20 billion in 2009, but diagram was again increases 25 $ billion in 2010. Every year aid is developed in Germany like $10, 15 and 16 $billonin in 2008, 2009 and 2010. All countries provided less aid the US but more then the Netherland and Sweden. There aid ranged between 10 and 15 billion dollar. The UK and japan aid was increby figure fall by 2009 in there two countries. But in 2010 aid increase in 2010.
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to developing
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from 2008-2010in
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billions
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interesting to note the Germany increased
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over the year.

The UK provided $20
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in 2008. The figure fall by
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$ 20
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in 2009,
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diagram was again increases
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billion
in 2010. Every year
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is developed
in Germany like $10, 15 and
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billonin in 2008, 2009 and 2010. All
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provided less
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the US
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more
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Netherland
and Sweden. There
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ranged between 10 and 15
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. The UK and japan
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in 2010
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increase in 2010.

IELTS academic The grabh shie da imgk a the green gass

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