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The glance at the diagram shows how to manufacturing bricks

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The glance at the diagram shows how to manufacturing bricks. In general, a closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that the process bricks involves 9 stages, commenting with digging clay and culminating with delivering for user. Looking at the diagram more closely, the clay is dug by a digger and then screened on a metal grid in the first stage of the process. This mixture then mixed with sand and water. Subsequently, it can be shaped in two ways: with a wire cutter or with a mould. In the next stage of the process, or 1-2 days, bricks are placed in a drying oven. They are then placed in a kiln at a moderate temperature of 200°C to 980°C, followed by a higher temperature of 870°C to 1300°C, before being placed in the cooling chamber for around 3 days. In the finally stage, they are neatly stacked and boxed before being delivered to consumers by truck.
The glance at the diagram
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shows
how to manufacturing bricks.

In general
, a closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that the process bricks involves 9
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stages
, commenting with digging clay and culminating with delivering for user.

Looking at the diagram more
closely
, the clay
is dug
by a digger and then screened on a metal grid in the
first
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stage
of the process. This mixture then mixed with sand and water.
Subsequently
, it can
be shaped
in two ways: with a wire cutter or with a
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mould
.

In the
next
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stage
of the process, or 1-2 days, bricks
are placed
in a drying oven. They are then placed in a kiln at a moderate temperature of
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200°C
to
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980°C
, followed by a higher temperature of
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870°C
to
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1300°C
,
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before
being placed
in the cooling chamber for around 3 days. In the
finally
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stage
, they are
neatly
stacked and boxed
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before
being delivered
to consumers by truck.
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IELTS academic The glance at the diagram shows how to manufacturing bricks

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158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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