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Spending public money to promote healthy lifestyle that leads to improve the quality of life is better than spending it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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IELTS academic Spending public money to promote healthy lifestyle that leads to improve the quality of life is better than spending it on treatment of people who are already ill. with this statement?

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