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The given pie charts show the amount of coffee produced and consumed throughout the world. Along with profit distribution

The given pie charts show the amount of coffee produced and consumed throughout the world. Along with profit distribution 3MEk5
The three pie charts give information about global coffee production, consumption and profit from numerous coffee-related businesses. Overall, Europeans and Americans drink the highest amount of coffee while South Africa is the biggest producer. Additionally, the coffee delivery service is the most profitable business among those compared. To begin with, citizens of Europe and America consume coffee four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan, whose production accounts for 18% internationally, only consume a mere 8% of global coffee. It is worth noticing that South Africa produces 44% of the coffee (more than anywhere else), which is exactly double than the coffee production in Indonesia - the country that makes the second-largest coffee. Along with South Africa, Indonesia and Japan, Vietnam also harvests coffee and the amount is 16%. Regarding profit distribution, it can be seen that more than half of it goes to the coffee delivery industry. Retailers get approximately a quarter while the figure for coffee producers' profit is only 15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent is what exporters receive.
The three pie charts give information about global
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coffee
production, consumption and profit from numerous coffee-related businesses.

Overall
, Europeans and Americans drink the highest amount of
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coffee
while South Africa is the biggest producer.
Additionally
, the
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coffee
delivery service is the most profitable business among those compared.

To
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begin
with, citizens of Europe and America consume
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coffee
four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan, whose production accounts for 18%
internationally
,
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only
consume a mere 8% of global coffee.

It is worth noticing that South Africa produces 44% of the
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coffee
(more than anywhere else), which is exactly double than the
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coffee
production in Indonesia
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the country that
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makes
the second-largest
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coffee
. Along with South Africa, Indonesia and Japan, Vietnam
also
harvests
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coffee
and the amount is 16%.

Regarding profit distribution, it can be
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seen
that more than half of it goes to the
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coffee
delivery industry. Retailers
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get
approximately a quarter while the figure for
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coffee
producers' profit is
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only
15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent is what exporters receive.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts show the amount of coffee produced and consumed throughout the world. Along with profit distribution

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