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The given data tells about portion of salary that people spend on the four items in 1998

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The the given data table shows the portion of salary that adults and children spent on food electronic equipments music and videos in the United Kingdom in 1998. Overall, adults worship and their large amount of income on food children spend their portion of income more on the music. In the given table, adult spend 25% on food while man spend 14% and women spent 39% on the food. On electronic equipments the others were spent 5%. On music only 5% of portion of salary was spent by the adults and on videos adults spent 1% portion of their salary. While men and women spend 10% and 1% on electronic equipment on music they both but spent 5%. Moon videos men and women only spent do and 0. 5 % of their salary which is too low as compared to others. On the other side children spend 10% on food while boys and girls work only spent nine percent and 11% of their income full stop on the electronic equipments children verse pant 23% and boys and girls were spent 18 and 15% of their income on the music children was pant 39% for boys and girls pant 38% and 40% portion of salary while on the video children's B 15% and boys spent 18% or girls were spent 17% of the portion of their salary
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in the United Kingdom in 1998.
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25% on
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14% and women
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the others were
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salary
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IELTS academic The given data tells about portion of salary that people spend on the four items in 1998

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