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The given pie charts show how people went to work and returned home in two years. Write a report in no less than 150 words

The given pie charts show how people went to work and returned home in two years. Write a report in no less than 150 words XyJMA
The average distance people traveling to reach office and come back to their home was 3. 5 kilometers in 1959 and this distance rose to 19 kilometers in 2009. There was a considerable increase in the average time to and from work, from 17 minutes to 42 minutes in 2009. The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of modes of transportation people used to travel to and from work in 1959 and 2009. The use of cars by daily commuters increased to a great extent between 1959 and 2009. By contrast, the percentage of people going to work on foot declined significantly. about 55% of people traveling to work on foot fell over half in comparision with the primary rate. Whereas, the cars became a good choice for more people, from only 10% to over one-third of the total over the period shown. This period saw a slight decrease in the proportion of daily commuters using the bus, while the figure for other modes of transportation dropped insignificantly, only 2%. And the number of frequent trains remain unchanged, at 15%
The average distance
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traveling to reach office and
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back to their home was 3. 5 kilometers in 1959 and this distance rose to 19 kilometers in 2009. There was a considerable increase in the average time to and from
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work
, from 17 minutes to 42 minutes in 2009. The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of modes of transportation
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people
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to travel to and from
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work
in 1959 and 2009. The
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use
of cars by daily commuters increased to a great extent between 1959 and 2009. By contrast, the percentage of
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people
going to
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work
on foot declined
significantly
.

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about
55% of
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people
traveling to
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work
on foot fell over half in
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comparision
with the primary rate. Whereas, the cars became a
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good
choice for more
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people
, from
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10% to over one-third of the total over the period shown. This period
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a slight decrease in the proportion of daily commuters using the bus, while the figure for other modes of transportation dropped
insignificantly
,
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only
2%. And the number of frequent trains remain unchanged, at 15%
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IELTS academic The given pie charts show how people went to work and returned home in two years. Write a report in no less than 150 words

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179 words
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