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The given pie charts compare the proportion of time spending on smartphone and tablets by six various category.

The given pie charts compare the proportion of time spending on smartphone and tablets by six various category. 6ayDx
The given pie charts compare the proportion of time spending on smartphone and tablets by six various category. The general overview here is that games sector indicated the majority of time spent on both smartphone and tablets, while later most of news sector on smartphone on the contrary utilities sector were the lowest amount of time spent on tablets. It can be seen that games sector were the most popular sector spending on smartphone and tablet, accounting for 35% and 57 % respectively. there were a number of 29% of social networking sector on smartphone which were higher 14% than the tablets. Similarly, the utilities sector illustrate the number of 20% time spending on smartphone, whereas it represented only 3% on the tablets. In contrast, the tablets experienced a high amount of 13% of music and videos sector on the other hand there were a figure of only 8% on smartphone. However, it is interesting to note that the news sector and the other sector represented the same extent of merely under 10% of the total percentage on both gadgets.
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spending on smartphone and tablets by six various
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indicated the majority of
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spent on both smartphone and tablets, while later
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most of news
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on smartphone
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utilities
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were the lowest amount of
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spent on tablets.

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that games
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were the most popular
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spending on smartphone and tablet, accounting for 35% and 57 %
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were a number of 29% of social networking
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on smartphone which were higher 14% than the tablets.
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, the utilities
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illustrate the number of 20%
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spending on smartphone, whereas it represented
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3% on the tablets.

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on the other hand
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8% on smartphone.
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and the other
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represented the same extent of
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under 10% of the total percentage on both gadgets.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts compare the proportion of time spending on smartphone and tablets by six various category.

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