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The given pie charts compare the major causes which drive commuters’ decision on their mode of transportation. Generally, what stands out from the graphs is that while most cyclists rated health and environment benefits as the main reasons, a clear majority cited that comfort and travelling distance are the explanation of their driving option.

The given pie charts compare the major causes which drive commuters’ decision on their mode of transportation. Generally, what stands out from the graphs is that while most cyclists rated health and environment benefits as the main reasons, a clear majority cited that comfort and travelling distance are the explanation of their driving option. B7rka
In the first graph, it could be easily observed that health and environment shared the equal major percentage of nearly a third each of the total responses. Other major factors influencing the decision for choosing bicycle were for parking availability, cost of owning and higher speed, with 15%, 13% and 12%, respectively. Regarding the second graph, the convenience for traveling experience which includes the comfort and longer distance of commuting. By contrast, the opposite trend can be seen with safety, speed and the needs to carry other objects when the remaining 39% is divided among these factors Interestingly, in the first graph which explains for cycling habit, speed accounted for 12% of all the responses, and this figure was very similar for the second graph of the driving option, at 11%.
In the
first
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, it could be
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observed that health and environment shared the equal major percentage of
nearly
a third each of the total responses. Other major factors influencing the decision for choosing bicycle were for parking availability, cost of owning and higher speed, with 15%, 13% and 12%,
respectively
.

Regarding the second
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, the convenience for traveling experience which includes the comfort and longer distance of commuting. By contrast, the opposite trend can be
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with safety, speed and the needs to carry other objects when the remaining 39%
is divided
among these factors
Interestingly
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for cycling habit, speed accounted for 12% of all the responses, and this figure was
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similar for the second
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of the driving option, at 11%.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts compare the major causes which drive commuters’ decision on their mode of transportation. Generally, what stands out from the graphs is that while most cyclists rated health and environment benefits as the main reasons, a clear majority cited that comfort and travelling distance are the explanation of their driving option.

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