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The given two pie charts elucidate the differences in diseases in two groups of countries which are developing and industrialized ones. Overall, it can be seen from the graphs, the proportion of ilnesses is different in the two pie charts. In underdeveloped countries infectious and parasitic diseases make up the largest amount while "other" ilnesses compose the greatest amount in developed nations. To begin with, in underdeveloped nations heart diseases account for 43% and infectious and parasitic ilnesses make up 46% while heart sicknesses compose 24% in industrialized countries. Then infectious diseases is only 1% in wealthy nations. That is to say that, this percentage is 46 times lower than developing ones. Further analyzing the graph, there is huge difference between underdeveloped and developed ones in other types of ilnesses, 2% and 54% respectively. The charts also show that cancer is 9% in unwealthy nations while it is 21% in developed ones.
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compose the greatest amount in developed nations.

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account for 43% and infectious and parasitic
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up 46% while heart sicknesses compose 24% in industrialized countries. Then infectious
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, 2% and 54%
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