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table in ielts part 2 about moblike

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The table provides data on the market share of mobile phone producers for two consecutive years 2005 and 2006. In general, the figure for Nokia, Motorola, and Sony Ericsson market segment saw three upward trends whereas Samsung, LG, BenQ Mobile witnessed falls in their rates of the total amount of mobile sales. As clearly seen from the table, Nokia was the market leader, selling 32. 5% of all mobile phones nearly one-third of the total in 2005, and continued to dominate when increasing by 2. 5% at the end of the period. This percentage is bigger than Motorola and Samsung added together. Likewise, the proportion of market share that Sony Ericsson and Motorola held rose slowly to 7. 4% and 21. 1% respectively. On the contrary, the companies listed here had a much smaller share of the market, during the first year Samsung underwent its share of the market decline mildly to 11. 8%. Same as Meanwhile LG decreased tediously from 6. 7% to 6. 3%. BenQ Mobile’s was the lowest market share, more than halved, hit a rough of 2, 4%. Other mobile phone makers accounted for 19. 2% in 2005- Nokia but decreased sharply to 16, 2% in the next year
The table provides data on the
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of mobile phone producers for two consecutive years 2005 and 2006.
In general
, the figure for Nokia, Motorola, and Sony Ericsson
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market
segment
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saw
three upward trends whereas Samsung, LG,
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BenQ
Mobile witnessed falls in their rates of the total amount of mobile sales.

As
clearly
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seen
from the table, Nokia was the
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leader, selling 32. 5% of all mobile phones
nearly
one-third of the total in 2005, and continued to dominate when increasing by 2. 5% at the
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end
of the period. This percentage is bigger than Motorola and Samsung
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added
together.
Likewise
, the proportion of
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that Sony Ericsson and Motorola held rose
slowly
to 7. 4% and 21. 1%
respectively
.

On the contrary
, the
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companies
listed here had a much smaller
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share
of the
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market
, during the
first
year Samsung underwent its
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share
of the
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market
decline
mildly
to 11. 8%. Same as Meanwhile LG decreased
tediously
from 6. 7% to 6. 3%.
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BenQ
Mobile’s was the lowest
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share
, more than halved, hit a rough of 2, 4%. Other mobile phone makers accounted for 19. 2% in 2005- Nokia
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decreased
sharply
to 16, 2% in the
next
year
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IELTS academic table in ielts part 2 about moblike

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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