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The given map illustrates some changes of a farm named Bell Hill over the period of three decades from 1976 to 2006

The given map illustrates some changes of a farm named Bell Hill over the period of three decades from 1976 to 2006 JKKo5
The given map illustrates some changes of a farm named Bell Hill over the period of three decades from 1976 to 2006 Overall, it is clear that the older infrastructures of the farm were replaced by some modern facilities for recreational purposes. In the year 1976, there was a farmyard in the center of the farm which was surrounded by many farming buildings and a road which acted as an entrance in the southwest corner of the farm. From the north-west corner to the south around the yard clockwise were a storehouse for keeping farm machinery, a barn where corn and other produce, cow sheds where cattle was raised, an area for free-range chicken, and a farmhouse were located respectively. To the south of the farm, there was a farmhouse. As of 2006, there was a significant change in the farming buildings. By 2006, only the entrance to the farm and the farmhouse had remained unchanged. In the center of the farm, the farmyard was made into a recreation area. In the north-west corner of the farm, the storage was replaced with a parking area while a multimedia room was added in the place of the old barn. In addition, the cowsheds and the chicken-rearing area were removed and to the east of the map stood student accommodations.
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named Bell Hill over the period of three

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decades
from 1976 to 2006

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, it is
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that the older infrastructures of the
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farm
were replaced
by
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some
modern facilities for recreational purposes.

In the year 1976, there was a farmyard in the center of the
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farm
which
was surrounded
by
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many
farming buildings and a road which acted as an entrance in the southwest corner of the
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farm
. From the north-west corner to the south around the yard clockwise were a storehouse for keeping
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farm
machinery, a barn where corn and other produce, cow sheds where cattle
was raised
, an
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area
for free-range chicken, and a farmhouse
were located
respectively
. To the south of the
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farm
, there was a farmhouse.

As of 2006, there was a significant
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change
in the farming buildings. By 2006,
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only
the entrance to the
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farm
and the farmhouse had remained unchanged. In the center of the
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farm
, the farmyard
was made
into a recreation
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area
. In the north-west corner of the
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farm
, the storage
was replaced
with a parking
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area
while a multimedia room was
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added
in the place of the
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old
barn.
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addition, the cowsheds and the chicken-rearing
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area
were removed
and to the east of the map stood student accommodations.
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IELTS academic The given map illustrates some changes of a farm named Bell Hill over the period of three decades from 1976 to 2006

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