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Bar graph show bad and good things

Bar graph show bad and good things ELLN3
The given bar graph depict the good and bad things of living standard qualities and line graph shows the major problem on london the data is calibrated in percentage. To commence with, the percentage of best things in london was ranges of shops which was maximum in all years. Afterthat the proportion of job opportunity and mixture of individuals was approximately similar. Then, the museums and art gallery was nearby 30% in first year and it was increased in 2nd and 3rd year and the proportion of nightlife, transport and others was approximately same. Moving further, the cost of living and crime was the worst part about 58% and it was decreased in 2nd and 3rd year. Thereafter, the proportion of traffic congestion was similar in first and second year respectively and it was declined in 3rd year which was about 48% and cost of housing was 35%. Then, the garbage was the biggest problem in London and noise was the problem that affected least to people. Overall, it is inferred that range of shops best things and traffic congestion of worst part highest as compared to other things
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bad
things of living standard qualities and line graph
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london
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in percentage.

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of best
things in
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london
was ranges of shops which was maximum in all years.
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Afterthat
the proportion of job opportunity and mixture of individuals was approximately similar. Then, the museums and art gallery was nearby 30% in
first
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year
and it
was increased
in 2nd and 3rd
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year
and the proportion of nightlife, transport
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and others
was approximately same.

Moving
further
, the cost of living and crime was the worst part about 58% and it
was decreased
in 2nd and 3rd
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year
. Thereafter, the proportion of traffic congestion was similar in
first
and second
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year
respectively
and it
was declined
in 3rd
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year
which was about 48% and cost of housing was 35%. Then, the garbage was the biggest problem in London and noise was the problem that
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affected
least to
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people
.

Overall
, it
is inferred
that range of
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shops best
things and traffic congestion of
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worst
part highest as compared to other things
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