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The given map chart depicts the information about the plans of public park when it first opened in the time period of 1920 and the same park in the present time.

The given map chart depicts the information about the plans of public park when it first opened in the time period of 1920 and the same park in the present time. lq0b9
The given map chart depicts the information about the plans of public park when it first opened in the time period of 1920 and the same park in the present time. Overview, there are most significant changes, the park retains the basic elements of water, flowers and seats and so on. After having a keen observation of the given data it is vivid that, in grange park 1920, in the north side, arnold avenue there were plenty of things which were built namely, entrance, seats, two rose gardens and along with them in the both opposite sides were seats and pond for water plants. Moreover, in the south side, there was eldon street along with it there was a entrance for entering and just along with the entrance here was also glasshouse as well as seats for seating. In the center of the grange park, there was one fountain and in the east side, there was also stage for musicians. In today's time of grange park, here is Arnold avenue just along with it here is main entrance and right side of the park, rose garden is built and in the left side, cafe and children's play area is newly constructed. In the south side, entrance is remained same and Eldon street is also but in the present time authority of the grange park who built the entrance underground car park. In the right side, water feature is newly constructed. In the center of the grange park, fountain is removed and rose garden and cover the surrounding with seats as well as, stage of musicians is also removed but amphitheater for concerts is established.
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map chart depicts the information about the plans of public
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park
when it
first
opened in the time period of 1920 and the same
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park
in the present time.

Overview, there are
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most
significant
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changes
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park
retains the basic elements of water, flowers and
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seats
and
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so
on.

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data it is vivid that, in grange
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park
1920, in the north side,
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arnold
avenue there were
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of things which
were built
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,
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entrance
,
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seats
, two rose gardens and
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with them in the both opposite
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were
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seats
and pond for water plants.
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, in the south side, there was
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eldon
street
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along
with it there was
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a
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entrance
for entering and
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entrance
here was
also
glasshouse
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as
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seats
for seating. In the center of the grange
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park
, there was one fountain and in the east side, there was
also
stage for musicians.

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park
, here is Arnold avenue
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along
with it here is main
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entrance
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park
, rose garden
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and in the
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left
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and children's play area is
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the south side,
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entrance
is remained
same and Eldon street is
also
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but
in the present time authority of the grange
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park
who built the
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entrance
underground car
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park
.
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In the right side
, water feature is
newly
constructed.
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the center of the grange
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park
, fountain
is removed
and rose garden and cover the surrounding with
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seats
as well
as, stage of musicians is
also
removed
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but
amphitheater for concerts
is established
.
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IELTS academic The given map chart depicts the information about the plans of public park when it first opened in the time period of 1920 and the same park in the present time.

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