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The given linegraph illustrates railways journeys of passenger in Britain between the year 1950 and 2004/5. The data of travelers is given in millions.

The given linegraph illustrates railways journeys of passenger in Britain between the year 1950 and 2004/5. The data of travelers is given in millions. Owq3d
Overall, the graph includes three railways network which was National rail network, London underground, and Light rail and metro systems. In the beginning of the year 1950, there werenot single passengers travelling in Light rail and metro systems. As per graph, it is visible that from the beginning and up to end, there were least utilization of metro and light rails. One thousand millions of travellers in Britain has taken national rail routes whereas about 700 million passengers travelled by underground networks. The line graph shows the fluctuation of number of British people travelling in national rail network and London underground. There was sudden rise about 1150 millions passenger travelling in rail route in around 1958. However, it was sharply declined to 650 millions in the year 1982. From 1955 to 1970, underground route the graph remained constant and gradually increased in year 1990, which reached about 820 million passenger. Both National rail network and London underground passengers number got plunged sharly at the end of the year 2004 and 2005. In year 1980, there were nearly zero passengers travelling in Light and metro railways. Travellers numbers were slightly increased in last 14 years.
Overall
, the
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graph
includes three railways
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network
which was
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National
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rail
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network
, London
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underground
, and
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Light
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rail
and
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metro
systems. In the beginning of the
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year
1950, there
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werenot
single
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passengers
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travelling
in
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Light
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rail
and
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metro
systems. As per
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graph
, it is visible that from the beginning and up to
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end
, there were
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least
utilization of
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metro
and
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light
rails.

One thousand
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millions
of
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travellers
in Britain has taken
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national
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rail
routes whereas about 700
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million
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passengers
travelled by
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underground
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networks
. The line
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graph
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shows
the fluctuation of number of British
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people
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travelling
in
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national
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rail
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network
and London
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underground
. There was sudden rise about 1150
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millions
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passenger
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travelling
in
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rail
route in around 1958.
However
, it was
sharply
declined to 650
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millions
in the
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year
1982. From 1955 to 1970,
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underground
route the
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graph
remained constant and
gradually
increased in
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year
1990, which reached about 820
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million
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passenger
.

Both
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National
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rail
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network
and London
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underground
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passengers
number
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got
plunged
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sharly
at the
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end
of the
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year
2004 and 2005. In
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year
1980, there were
nearly
zero
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passengers
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travelling
in
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Light
and
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metro
railways.
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Travellers
numbers were
slightly
increased in last 14 years.

IELTS academic The given linegraph illustrates railways journeys of passenger in Britain between the year 1950 and 2004/5. The data of travelers is given in millions.

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