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The supplied diagram sketches out the production process for making sugar from sugar cane. Overall, it contains seven steps, beginning with the growing the canes and ending with drying and cooling the sugar. Once sugar canes have grown for one year or one year and a half, they had been harvested in two different ways which are mechanically by machines or manually by farmers. After that, the collected sugar canes have transferred to the crushing step, that is the third step in the whole process, and their juice has come out in this stage. Following this step, juice had undergone to the limestone filter, where it had been purifying. In the fifth step of the process, the purified juice has gone to evaporator, where it has been transformed into syrup with heat. Once this step has been fulfilled, syrup has passed thorough centrifuge to separating sugar crystals in it. In the final step, sugar has been stored in a container to drying and cooling.
The supplied diagram sketches out the production process for making
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sugar
from
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sugar
cane.

Overall
, it contains seven
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steps
, beginning with the growing the canes and ending with drying

and cooling the sugar.

Once
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sugar
canes have grown for one year or one year and a half, they had
been harvested


in two
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different
ways which are
mechanically
by machines or
manually
by farmers. After that,

the collected
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sugar
canes have transferred to the crushing
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step
,
that is
the third
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step
in the

whole process, and their juice has
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come
out in this stage. Following this
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step
, juice had

undergone to the limestone filter, where it had been purifying.

In the fifth
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step
of the process, the purified juice has gone to evaporator, where it has
been transformed
into syrup with heat. Once this
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step
has
been fulfilled
, syrup has passed thorough

centrifuge to separating
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sugar
crystals in it. In the final
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step
,
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sugar
has
been stored
in a

container to drying and cooling.

IELTS academic diagram with production process

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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