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The given line graph illustrates the information about the population size, and also compares the birth and mortality rate of England and Wales for a period of 300 years starting 1700.

The given line graph illustrates the information about the population size, and also compares the birth and mortality rate of England and Wales for a period of 300 years starting 1700. 8RjV
The given line graph illustrates the information about the population size, and also compares the birth and mortality rate of England and Wales for a period of 300 years starting 1700. It is evident that the population showed an upward trend, whereas death and birth rate showed a fluctuating trend. The death and the birth rates followed a similar trend from 1700-1950. From 1700-1750, an increase was seen in both these, with the birth rate rising from 30 to 40 births per 1000 people and the death rate increasing from 27 to 37 per 1000 people. There was stability in both for the next 50 years, after which there was a sharp fall with both rates reaching an all time low of around 20 per thousand people by 1950. In between, from 1850 to 1900, birth and death rate again showed a leveling off. From 1950 to 2000, the death rate remained stable. In contrast, the birth rate increased dramatically, from 22 to 35 births per 1000 people. The three centuries saw a dramatic escalation in population from 2. 5 million in 1700 to 50 million in 2000, with a short period of stability from 1750-1800.
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line graph illustrates the information about the population size, and
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compares the
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and mortality
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of England and Wales for a period of 300 years starting

1700. It is evident that the population
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showed
an upward trend, whereas death and birth

rate
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showed
a fluctuating trend.

The death and the
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birth
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followed a similar trend from 1700-1950. From 1700-1750, an

increase was
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in both these, with the
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birth
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rising from 30 to 40
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births
per 1000
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people


and the death
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increasing from 27 to 37 per 1000
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people
. There was stability in both for

the
next
50 years, after which there was a sharp fall with both
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rates
reaching an
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all time
low

of around 20 per thousand
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people
by 1950. In between, from 1850 to 1900,
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birth
and death

rate again
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showed
a leveling off. From 1950 to 2000, the death
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rate
remained stable. In

contrast, the
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birth
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increased
dramatically
, from 22 to 35
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births
per 1000
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people
.

The three centuries
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a dramatic escalation in population from 2. 5 million in 1700 to 50

million in 2000, with a short period of stability from 1750-1800.

IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the information about the population size, and also compares the birth and mortality rate of England and Wales for a period of 300 years starting 1700.

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