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The given line graph illustrates the amount of macronutrients (fat, carbohydrate, protein) intake by Australians in kilocalories per day per person from 1909 to 2006.

The given line graph illustrates the amount of macronutrients (fat, carbohydrate, protein) intake by Australians in kilocalories per day per person from 1909 to 2006. 6xK9x
The given line graph illustrates the amount of macronutrients (fat, carbohydrate, protein) intake by Australians in kilocalories per day per person from 1909 to 2006. Overall, carbohydrates were the most consumed nutrient among all other items followed by fat and protein. Carbohydrate slightly fluctuated before rising up over a period of time. Fat intake was gradually increased and protein consumption was remained relatively stable. In 1909, carbohydrate is the highest consumption of macronutrients among Aussies which is 1400 kilocalories per day per person and fluctuated over the years and ends at 1400kcal by 1999. Comparatively, fat consumption was 200 kilocalories per day, which is the second consumed nutrients in 1909 and ended at 1000 kcal. Although, it rose and fell, but recovered gradually by 1999. In contrast, protein intake was low among all micronutrients: it started at around 300 kilocalories per day which is remained relatively stable over the years.
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carbohydrate
, protein) intake by Australians in kilocalories per day per person from 1909

to 2006.

Overall
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carbohydrates
were the most consumed nutrient among all other items followed by
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fat
and protein.
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Carbohydrate
slightly
fluctuated
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before
rising up over a period of time.
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Fat
intake was
gradually
increased and protein consumption
was remained
relatively
stable.

In 1909,
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carbohydrate
is the highest consumption of macronutrients among Aussies which is 1400 kilocalories per day per person and fluctuated over the years and ends at 1400kcal by 1999.
Comparatively
,
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fat
consumption was 200 kilocalories per day, which is the second consumed nutrients in 1909 and ended at 1000 kcal. Although, it rose and fell,
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but
recovered
gradually
by 1999.
In contrast
, protein intake was low among all micronutrients: it
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started
at around 300 kilocalories per day which
is remained
relatively
stable over the years.
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the amount of macronutrients (fat, carbohydrate, protein) intake by Australians in kilocalories per day per person from 1909 to 2006.

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