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The given line graph Illustrates information about three areas of crimes in Manchester over the nine years period from 2003.

The given line graph Illustrates information about three areas of crimes in Manchester over the nine years period from 2003. kbAEO
The given line graph Illustrates information about three areas of crimes in Manchester over the nine years period from 2003. Overall, it can be seen, that the figure of burglary began the highest but witnessed decline towards the end of the period. Conversely, rate of car stolen has increased period o given. Crime of robbery was the lowest figure whole nine years. In the beginning of the period, Burglary cases reported nearly 3500 and it was reached peak amounting 3800 in 2004. Next year cases are rapidly decreased into closely 1000 in 2008 although, next year it increased up to 1500. Next three years witnessed slightly fluctuation and declined to 1400 in 2012. However, the figure of car theft is showed 2300 in 2003. This amount fluctuated among 2000and 2500 until2009. Next year reported 2510 and this number rose up to 2800 end of the timeframe. Numbers of Robbery cases are reported 500 in 2003 and it became closely double in 2005 and it again declined to 500. This number was continues till 2009 and next year it had slightly rose by 10 then stared to decline to 500 in end of the period.
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line graph Illustrates information about three areas of crimes in Manchester over the nine years
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period
from 2003.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
, that the figure of burglary began the highest
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but
witnessed decline towards the
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end
of the
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.
Conversely
, rate of car stolen has increased
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period
o
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. Crime of robbery was the lowest figure whole nine years.

In the beginning of the
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, Burglary cases reported
nearly
3500 and it
was reached
peak amounting 3800 in 2004.
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Next
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year
cases are
rapidly
decreased into
closely
1000 in 2008 although,
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next
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year
it increased up to 1500.
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Next
three years witnessed
slightly
fluctuation and declined to 1400 in 2012.
However
, the figure of car theft is
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showed
2300 in 2003. This amount fluctuated among 2000and 2500 until2009.
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Next
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year
reported 2510 and this number rose up to 2800
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end
of the timeframe.

Numbers of Robbery cases
are reported
500 in 2003 and it became
closely
double in 2005 and it again declined to 500. This number was continues till 2009 and
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next
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year
it had
slightly
rose by 10 then stared to decline to 500 in
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end
of the
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.
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IELTS academic The given line graph Illustrates information about three areas of crimes in Manchester over the nine years period from 2003.

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