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The given line graph describes the people’s movement from rural to urban areas in three different states and shows how it will go in the future.

The given line graph describes the people’s movement from rural to urban areas in three different states and shows how it will go in the future. NYa2
The given line graph describes the people’s movement from rural to urban areas in three different states and shows how it will go in the future. Overall, by the given chart it can be clear that replacing to urban areas will grow in the future by predictions. In 2000, all three countries started their ways already from the same point, around 10 and 15 million. And at the beginning the Republic of Russia stood at about 15 million. Over the period 2010 and 2015 immigration of Russian people increased considerably and continued growing. For the time till 2010, the amount of immigrants reached approximately 40-45. Iran showed very slightly effect on going up between 2000 and 2005 and rose only to 10, after what it rose significantly and took 35 million on the time as same as Russia. While, Russia and Iran kept up growing, Indonesia did not appear speedy rising, and begun to rise slowly till the 2020. In the time, when, other countries will climb quickly by the shown predictions, however, Indonesia wil not have any changes, and will remain constantly at point 30 million. (187)
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. And at the beginning the Republic of Russia stood at about 15
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. Over the period 2010 and 2015 immigration of Russian
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on the time as same as Russia. While, Russia and Iran
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up growing, Indonesia did not appear speedy rising, and begun to rise
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IELTS academic The given line graph describes the people’s movement from rural to urban areas in three different states and shows how it will go in the future.

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