Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

 The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. RBl8
These two diagrams illustrate the different steps and procedures during cement production as well as the process of making concrete from cement and other ingredients to be used in construction. Firstly, it`s noticeable that the process of cement making is divided into five stages. The limestone and the clay are the basic substances that are used for cement production. They are crushed between two rollers to produce a soft powder. Secondly, this soft powder is mixed well in a mixer. Onwards, the mixture is heated by passing through a large cylindrical rotating tube called the rotating heater. After heating, the mixture still has some small gravels, so it has to be smashed by the grinder to produce the soft cement. Finally, cement is packed in bags to be ready for use. On the other hand, concrete making is a one-step procedure, four ingredients are used in different percentages, Gravel constitutes 50% of the concrete mixture and sand forms about one quarter. However, cement participate by only 15%. These three components together with water are mixed in a large rotating barrel to produce the concrete the latter can be used for building purposes. To conclude, it can be seen that the equipment and stages of production of both types of cement and concrete are different and simple.
These two diagrams illustrate the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
steps and procedures during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
production
as well
as the process of making concrete from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
and other ingredients to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in construction.

Firstly
,
You used an accent character instead of an apostrophe. Please use either "it's" or "it’s".
it`s
noticeable that the process of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
making
is divided
into five stages. The limestone and the clay are the basic substances that are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
production. They
are crushed
between two rollers to produce a soft powder.

Secondly
, this soft powder
is mixed
well in a mixer. Onwards, the mixture
is heated
by passing through a large cylindrical rotating tube called the rotating heater. After heating, the mixture
still
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
gravels,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
be smashed
by the grinder to produce the soft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
.
Finally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
is packed
in bags to be ready for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

On the other hand
, concrete making is a one-step procedure, four ingredients are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
percentages, Gravel constitutes 50% of the concrete mixture and sand forms about one quarter.
However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
participate by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
15%. These three components together with water
are mixed
in a large rotating barrel to produce the concrete the latter can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for building purposes.

To conclude
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that the equipment and stages of production of both types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
and concrete are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
and simple.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
216 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  •  The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.